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Trong đoạn introduction, lần đầu tiên nhắc đến '20-year period" như trong ví dụ sau thì mình dùng "a 20-year period" hay "the 20-year period". Cám ơn các bạn.
EX: The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years over a 20-year period.
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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001.
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The three pie charts present the trend of annual expenditure in an UK school in 1981,1991,2001. At first glance, teachers' salaries remained the largest percentage of the total expenditure.
The teacher's salaries were fluctuated across the period. It started from 40% in 1981, followed by 50 % in 1991 and reduced to 45% in 2001. Resources such as books experienced a similar pattern. In 1981, it occupied 15% of the spending and it rose to one fifth in 1991 before dropping to 9% in 2001.
Other workers' salaries had been decreasing over last three decades, which reduced from 288% in 1981 to only 15% in 2001. On the other hand, more money had spent on insurance. It first rose by 1% to 3 % in 1991 and then dramatically climbed to 8% in 2001. Furniture and equipment also increased from 15% in 1981 to 23% in 2001, despite the fact that it declined by 10% in 1991.
Overall, teachers and other workers' salaries, furniture and equipment were the highest expenses of the school for the last 30 years.
The three pie charts present the trend đối với pie chart không có trend bạn à of annual expenditure in an UK school in 1981,1991,2001 nhớ có dấu cách nha bạn. At first glance, teachers' salaries remained the largest percentage of the total expenditure. nên dùng spending để tránh lặp từ
The teacher's salaries were fluctuated (khi miêu tả biểu đồ, vì chúng ta đang tường thuật lại 1 dữ liệu, chi tiết có thật nên có xu hướng dùng thì QUÁ KHỨ HOÀN THÀNH hay QUÁ KHỨ HOÀN THÀNH TIẾP DIỄN thay vì dùng BỊ ĐỘNG) across the period. It started from 40% in 1981, followed by 50 % in 1991 and reduced to 45% in 2001. Resources such as books experienced a similar pattern. In 1981, it occupied 15% of the spending and it rose to one fifth in 1991 before dropping to 9% in 2001.
Other workers' salaries had been decreasing over last three decades, which reduced from 288% in 1981 to only 15% in 2001. On the other hand, more money had spent had been spent on insurance. It first rose by from 1% to 3 % in 1991 and then dramatically climbed to 8% in 2001. Furniture and equipment also increased from 15% in 1981 to 23% in 2001, despite the fact that it declined by 10% in 1991.
Overall, teachers and other workers' salaries, furniture and equipment were the highest expenses of the school for the last 30 years.
Cuộc sống của bạn là của bạn và chính bạn chịu trách nhiệm cho chính cuộc đời mình chứ không phải tôi, bố mẹ hay bạn bè,…
Khi thì có cần phải có dấu cách giữa các đoạn văn như bài của bạn shure ở trên không vậy bạn hummingbird?
Không cần đâu bạn. Chỉ xuống hàng bình thường thôi, và tất cả các đoạn văn thẳng đầu hàng là được.
Cuộc sống của bạn là của bạn và chính bạn chịu trách nhiệm cho chính cuộc đời mình chứ không phải tôi, bố mẹ hay bạn bè,…
Bạn có thể cho thêm ví dụ ở chỗ bạn nói dùng thì QUÁ KHỨ HOÀN THÀNH và QUÁ KHỨ HOÀN THÀNH TIẾP DIỄN ở trên thêm không?
Resources such as books had experienced a similar pattern.
In 1981, it had occupied 15% of the spending and it rose to one fifth in 1991 before dropping to 9% in 2001.
Cuộc sống của bạn là của bạn và chính bạn chịu trách nhiệm cho chính cuộc đời mình chứ không phải tôi, bố mẹ hay bạn bè,…
Mình cũng muốn đóng góp ý kiến với mọi người nữa, các bạn ủng hộ nha.
Three charts provided compares the total expenditure including 5 various different amounts of a UK school in three year 1981, 1991, and 2001.
It is evident that there were different changes amongst 5 types of spending in 3 given years.
With 40% in 1981, 50% in 1991 and 45% in 2001, teachers' salaries constituted the highest proportion of total expenditure, whereas insurance accounted for the lowest percentage ranging from a mere 2% to 8%. In contrast with the increase of insurance, other workers' salaries decreased gradually from 28% to 15% in 20 years.
Meanwhile, two other types of expenditure experienced different fluctuations. After a noticeable increase of 5% in 1991, the percentage of spending for resources books dropped dramatically to just under a tenth in 2001. By contrast, the proportion of total amount for furniture and equipments witnessed a sharp fall of 10% in the first ten years, then surged to under a quarter in 2001.
The Three charts provided compares comparision in the total expenditure including 5 various different amounts of a UK school in three the years 1981, 1991, and 2001.
It is evident that there were different changes amongst 5 types of spending in 3 the three given years.
With 40% in 1981, 50% in 1991 and 45% in 2001, teachers' salaries constituted the highest proportion of total expenditure, whereas insurance accounted for the lowest percentage ranging from a mere 2% to 8%. In contrast with the increase of insurance, other workers' salaries decreased gradually from 28% to 15% in 20 years.
Meanwhile, two other types of expenditures experienced different fluctuations. After a noticeable increase of 5% in 1991, the percentage of spending for resources books dropped dramatically to just under a tenth in 2001. By contrast, the proportion of total amount for furniture and equipments witnessed a sharp fall of 10% in the first ten years, then surged nên là plunged to under a quarter in 2001.
The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years over a 20-year period.
It is clear that teachers’ salaries made up the largest proportion of the school’s spending in all three years (1981, 1991 and 2001). By contrast, insurance was the smallest cost in each year.
In 1981, 40% of the school’s budget went on teachers’ salaries. This figure rose to 50% in 1991, but fell again by 5% in 2001. The proportion of spending on other workers’ wages fell steadily over the 20-year period, from 28% of the budget in 1981 to only 15% in 2001.
Expenditure on insurance stood at only 2% of the total in 1981, but reached 8% in 2001. Finally, the percentages for resources and furniture/equipment fluctuated. The figure for resources was highest in 1991, at 20%, and the proportion of spending on furniture and equipment reached its peak in 2001, at 23%.
Mình nghĩ đây là một bài rất hay. Mình rất thích các cấu trúc của bạn và tô lại cho mọi người cùng để ý. Cám ơn nhungconduongkyniem nha,
The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the UK in three different years over a 20-year period.
It is clear that teachers’ salaries made up the largest proportion of the school’s spending in all three years (1981, 1991 and 2001). By contrast, insurance was the smallest cost in each year.
In 1981, 40% of the school’s budget went on teachers’ salaries. This figure rose to 50% in 1991, but fell again by 5% in 2001. The proportion of spending on other workers’ wages fell steadily over the 20-year period, from 28% of the budget in 1981 to only 15% in 2001.
Expenditure on insurance stood at only 2% of the total in 1981, but reached 8% in 2001. Finally, the percentages for resources and furniture/equipment fluctuated. The figure for resources was highest in 1991, at 20%, and the proportion of spending on furniture and equipment reached its peak in 2001, at 23%.
Cuộc sống của bạn là của bạn và chính bạn chịu trách nhiệm cho chính cuộc đời mình chứ không phải tôi, bố mẹ hay bạn bè,…
Bài ấy mình còn thấy hay nhiều chỗ nữa. Để tránh lặp từ bạn ấy đã thay rất nhiều cấu trúc như:
- Over a 20-year period
Over the 20-year period
- In three different years
In all three years
- Expenditure/ Spending
Expenditure of X (a school)
Expenditure on Y (insurance) + verb
The proportion of the school’s spending + verb
The proportion of spending on X (other worker’s wages/ on furniture and equipment) + verb
The percentages for X and Y + verb
- Cost – school budget
Salaries – wages
- The figure for + noun (resources)
This figure + verb (rose to)
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